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ETHOS

I built credibility by talking about my prior experiences with my topic, and by showing empathy by not saying it is the individuals fault completely but they make the final choices. It is also the food industry and the governments fault.

I cited and quoted my sources properly. I introduced who they were some of the time but not all the time.

I believe most of my sources were credible. Most of the data I found on one source, I found on another one increasing the fact that it is more credible.

I did present how I was connected to it through my father and my uncle. Also, through my job.

I think the audience feels I am knowledgeable in the subject. At least I hope they do. I spent a lot of time reading deep into the topic.

I don’t think my topic was focused on one audience. I think everyone could take something from it and benefit it. I didn’t appeal to an opposing view point.

I am empathetic, understanding, and respectful in my language towards who it effects the most.

My solution is ethical. It involved the government, food industry, and the individual. It wasn’t something unethical like killing all overweight people.

My essay was appropriately written for an academic audience. I followed MLA format, used correct grammar, and appropriate vocabulary.

My conclusion is based on prior experiences with my topic. I found an article that just went more in-depth with it.

LOGOS

My essay was logical in my conclusion and had evidence.

My solution is practical and specific. I went into how it is not just one parts fault but all three. I didn’t provide evidence that my solution would work because the evidence is still being creating and change is still happening. Obesity has been around for awhile but not on an epidemic scale.

I order my paper logically with what is obesity, health problems, money spent, who it effects more, and my solution on it. I finished with why I wrote it. I could have tied why i wrote it more into the beginning rather than at the end.

I probably used a small amount of fallacies, more of unintended if I did.

PATHOS

I appealed empathetic and also firm believing my audience would be mostly empathetic. I was empathetic by not blaming it solely on the individual, but firm in saying they do play the biggest role in it all.

No I didn’t appeal to shared values of my audience.

As I stated with the fallacies, I probably used some manipulative language in the form of fallacies but it wasn’t intended.

I connected by sharing my past experiences with obesity briefly rather than making it a story.

I made it seem like i cared about the subject by talking about past experiences with my issue. I made it evident by stating how personal those experiences were.

https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/1LURI2y3BYq4cK26za3jx6Z1SQlj7KgJVR-zZ0rvHJTM/edit?usp=sharing

Diego Miranda

Janel Spencer

WRT101S 12157

Nov. 26, 2019

Fighting Obesity

Obesity and the related diseases are one of the leading causes of deaths in the United States. Obesity has many definitions but an easy one to remember is an excess of body fat that can cause health problems. According to Honor Whiteman of Medical News Today, “Over the past 33 years, worldwide overweight and obesity rates among adults have increased by 27.5%, while such rates among children and adolescents have increased by 47.1%.” There are many health risks related to obesity, including type 2 diabetes, multiple types of cancers, heart disease, and a lot more. Subsequently, people that are obese end up spending more for medical each year and other things such as life insurance(Raza). Obesity is a very complex situation so there are many variables that have to work together for a common solution.

According to the CDC, “weight that is higher than what is considered as a healthy weight for a given height is described as overweight or obese”(“Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity”).The same source said that a BMI between 25-29.9 is overweight and anything 30 or over is obese (“Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity”).BMI is easy to calculate. You divide your weight in pounds by your height in inches squared then multiply that by 703 (Centers for Disease Control and Prevention).BMI is an easy screening tool to use but doesn’t tell all about someone’s body. For instance, if someone has a lot of muscle mass but is short and they calculate their BMI, they could fall under the obese or overweight side of the scale. This is why BMI is only a screening tool and isn’t a tell all.

There are many health problems related to obesity and being overweight. Some of them include heart disease, stroke, high blood pressure, diabetes, cancer, gallbladder disease, osteoarthritis, gout, and asthma (“Obesity: Health Risks Associated with Obesity”). A study in 2013 found that obesity accounts for 18% of deaths among Americans with ages ranging from 40 to 85 (Blumenthal and Seervai). For cancer, obesity caused “7% of cancer related deaths” (Blumenthal and Seervai). “Obese people are between 1.5 to 2.5 times more likely to die of heart disease than people with normal body mass indices” (Blumenthal and Seervai). The World Health Organization said, “Obesity has reached epidemic proportions globally, with at least 2.8 million people dying each year as a result of being overweight or obese” (“10 Facts on Obesity”).

Not only is there a health effect of obesity, but a dollar effect also. According to the CDC, “the estimated annual medical cost of obesity in the United States was $147 billion in 2008 US dollars” (“Adult Obesity Facts”). Value Walk made a diagram that breaks down individual costs of being obese in the United States. It said that annually that the costs for males was $2,646, and the cost for females was $4,879 (Raza). Some of the reasons women’s cost was higher was wage discrimination, and sick leave, compared to men (Raza). Annually, “…An estimated 50 million days of unemployment and $150 billion in productivity are lost… in the U.S. due to overweight and obesity-related chronic conditions” (Blumenthal, Susan).

Obesity affects almost everyone. You either know of someone obese, someone who has died from obesity, or you are obese. Obesity doesn’t just affect one community, but it is prevalent in some places more than others: “Hispanics (47.0%) and non-Hispanic blacks (46.8%) had the highest age-adjusted prevalence of obesity, followed by non-Hispanic whites (37.9%) and non-Hispanic Asians (12.7%)” (“Adult Obesity Facts.”). Obesity is also higher in low- income communities. Lower income communities face struggles like, “…accessing healthy foods, a lack of nutrition education, a dearth of safe environments for physical activity and recreation, and food marketing targeted to this population” (Blumenthal, Susan).

Childhood obesity is also on the rise with “More than 9 million adolescents… affected by excess weight” (“Obesity Statistics”). If you suffer from obesity in your childhood, you are “70% more likely to continue being affected by it into adulthood” (“Obesity Statistics”). Many things lead to this. One of them being the rise in sedentary lifestyles humans live and technological advances (“Obesity Statistics”). This lifestyle has led to a decline of physical activity and an increase in watching more TV. “More than 40 percent of children watch 2 or more hours of television each day” (“Obesity Statistics”). We must break this lifestyle and our instant rely on technology if we are to have a fighting chance against obesity. When former President Obama was in office, childhood obesity was so bad that his wife, Michelle Obama, made the “Let’s Move” program. The program had five pillars to curb obesity (National Archives and Records Administration).These five pillars were to “create a healthy start for children, empower parents and caregivers, provide healthy food in schools, improve access to healthy, affordable foods, and increase physical activity” (National Archives and Records Administration). These same five pillars apply today to fight childhood obesity.

Since obesity is such a complex problem, it requires a complex situation. The major variables in this problem are the individual, the government, and the food industry. There is a common saying that almost everyone that goes to the gym has heard one time or another. The saying is “you can’t outwork a bad diet.” Meaning that no matter how much you work out, it won’t matter if you still eat bad. The food industry plays a huge factor in the fight on obesity. Most people aren’t obese because they don’t workout enough, or at all, but because they eat too many unhealthy calories.

In an article titled “Solutions to obesity: perspectives from the food industry,” Patricia Verduin, Sanjiv Agarwal, and Susan Waltman make related claims. In the article relating to the food industry, they say:

Industry should promote nutrition education at all levels, from public schools to medical schools, and enhance nutrition awareness at the consumer level. Industry can create new products that meet individual nutritional needs, reformulate existing products to be healthier, and provide controlled portion sizes. In doing so, industry faces the challenge of satisfying consumer expectations for taste, quality, and price. The hope is that industry can develop healthier products by partnering with science-based communities and the government. (Verduin et al.)

These sentences from this source are putting responsibility on the food industry to show transparency about the nutritional side of the food and to make healthier options for the consumer and not just the cheapest thing they can make. 

The article talks about the individual, as well, saying:

Consumers are the most important player in the solution to the obesity epidemic because they make individualized choices about food and lifestyle. As stated by Philipson in this symposium, if the consumer can be influenced with comprehensible nutrition information and a variety of healthy food choices, perhaps individuals can begin to address weight gain on a personal level. In addition to cultural and psychological influences, four motivators have been identified that affect consumer decisions: taste, quality, convenience, and price. Although consumers indicate that healthy eating and good nutrition are increasingly important to them, sales and surveys show they are more concerned with taste, convenience, and price…Moreover, consumers are confused with the conflicting messages regarding fat, carbohydrates, protein, and calories. Consumers need clarity and reliable nutrition information to make responsible dietary decisions.(Verduin et al.)

This paragraph is putting responsibility on the individual. They are the most important variable in this whole thing because they are the ones that make the decisions about what to eat and the lifestyle they live. It then goes on to talk about if there are multiple choices of healthy food to eat, and with proper education on nutrition, they can make better decisions on what to eat. 

The source talks about the government’s role in obesity by saying: 

The government can help educate consumers to make healthier choices through food labeling, physical activity endorsement, and the support of community-based programs. The food industry should cooperate with the government to guarantee the production and availability of low-calorie, nutritious foods. This can be achieved by providing incentives to industry and also stimulating media participation in the prevention of obesity. The government should develop and support new food technology and improve communication across responsible parties and consumers. (Verduin et al.)

This puts responsibility on the government, local or federal, to help educate people on what they are eating and help people get out and be more active. It talks about the food industry and the government working together to make healthier foods for the individual.

            The obesity problem is all around the world. The solution to it is the government and the food industry working together to make healthy affordable options for people to eat and be transparent on what they are putting out there. Also, to educate people on what they are eating. The individual needs to take advantage of the opportunity to learn about what they are eating, and also take advantage of healthier choices that are being sold. At the end of the day, it is up to the individual to make the choice and want to live a healthier lifestyle.

Everyone should hold themselves accountable and realize when their weight might be affecting their health. You can also hold other people accountable for their health by mentioning something to them and encouraging them to do something about it. You could even take it as far as helping them eat healthier and taking them to the gym.

Back towards the beginning of high school, I lost one of my uncles to a stroke due to him being obese. At the time I had a little extra weight that I wanted to lose. As sad as it was, this was a good push to not end up like my uncle and live an unhealthy lifestyle. From then on, I decided to get in shape and help people live a healthier lifestyle. Many times, at work, people have asked me for nutritional advice or to help them get in shape for their physical training test. My call to action is wanting to help people live healthy lifestyles.

Works Cited

 “Adult Obesity Facts.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control 

and Prevention, 13 Aug. 2018, https://www.cdc.gov/obesity/data/adult.html, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Blumenthal, David. Seervai, Shanoor. “Rising Obesity in the United States Is a Public Health 

Crisis.” Home, 24 Apr. 2018, https://www.commonwealthfund.org/blog/2018/rising-obesity-united-states-public-health-crisis, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Blumenthal, Susan. “Poverty And Obesity: Breaking The Link.” HuffPost, HuffPost, 7 Dec. 

2017, https://www.huffpost.com/entry/poverty-obesity_b_1417417?guccounter=1&guce_referrer=aHR0cHM6Ly93d3cuZ29vZ2xlLmNvbS8&guce_referrer_sig=AQAAAJ3SCHW0Z75kH-sNY98hCrGi5W3P5EllCM4Y132UapzgPyiAIibijeZhU1VLQDSmLOZz-zsRASE4piYHD8-s79ADqe–sRxILSHBlTtVd0ZIPkOu8aYfOnFZTTdocS95gXfccVqfDP-Z_ZoIqM0mf71-zNzzgWRTNHse0f7z3q0Q, Accessed 10 Dec. 2019.

 Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 

https://www.cdc.gov/healthyweight/assessing/bmi/childrens_bmi/childrens_bmi_formula.html,Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

 “Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers 

for Disease Control and Prevention, 11 Apr. 2017, https://www.cdc.gov/obesity/adult/defining.html, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

National Archives and Records Administration, National Archives and Records Administration, 

            https://letsmove.obamawhitehouse.archives.gov/about, Accessed 6 Dec. 2019.

 “Obesity: Health Risks Associated with Obesity.” OnHealth,

https://www.onhealth.com/content/1/health_risks_associated_with_obesity, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

“Obesity Statistics.” Obesity Action Coalition, https://www.obesityaction.org/get-educated/public-resources/obesity-statistics-fact-sheets/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Raza, Sheeraz. “The Costs Of Obesity, In Actual Dollars [Chart].” ValueWalk, 24 Aug. 2016, 

https://www.valuewalk.com/2016/08/the-costs-of-obesity-in-actual-dollars-chart/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

“10 Facts on Obesity.” World Health Organization, World Health Organization, 16 Oct. 2017, 

https://www.who.int/features/factfiles/obesity/en/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Verduin, Patricia, et al. “Solutions to Obesity: Perspectives from the Food Industry.” OUP 

Academic, Oxford University Press, 1 July 2005, https://academic.oup.com/ajcn/article/82/1/259S/4863410, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Whiteman, Honor. “Worldwide Obesity Rates See ‘Startling’ Increase over Past 

Decades.” Medical News Today, MediLexicon International, 29 May 2014, https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/277450.php#1, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

1 overly sentimental appeal- they start off with abortion is murder already putting too much emotion into their argument

2 overly sentimental appeal- they put too much emotion into their argument saying it is murder

3 faulty casualty- they are saying based on their one experience the result is clear

4 straw man- nobody was arguing that they can’t play music they were saying it was too loud

5 hasty generalization- they are saying he is a fool because he was taking risks which is a generalization

6 non sequitur-their reasoning doesn’t make sense

7 appeal to false authority- they are saying because Abraham Lincoln said it, it must be true

8 red herring- they are bringing up an irrelevant question

9 red herring- they bring up an irrelevant topic to shut down the bridge, should you shut down all tall buildings because people jump off those too?

17 hasty generalization- you are assuming the older person is male

24 overly sentimental appeal- they put too much emotion into the argument saying it never should have been on public display

25 begging the question- they are saying the conclusion instead of supporting it

26 either/ or- saying that you either win because of the charm or you lose because of the charm

27 hasty generalization- the conclusion doesn’t make sense

28 protecting the facts- they are making it seem like the earth is flat and that is why the ship is sinking and not because the earth is flat

29 none

30 none

31 none

32 either/ or- they are saying that you either have to kill five people or kill one of them

scare tactics- exploits natural fear, makes disasters seem more likely to occur

either or- make the reader think there is only an either or answer and no other option

slippery slope- one small thing will lead to a snow ball effect

overly sentiment appeal- an appeal is based on excessive emotion

bandwagon- argument must be true because many people believe it

appeal to false authority-using an authority that is not a real authority

dogmatism- when information is pushed as the only conclusion

ad hominem- attack the person rather than their arguement

stacking the deck- any evidence that argues against the solution is omitted, rejected, or ignored

hasty generalization- conclusion that is reached is not just

faulty casualty- assumption that just because one thing happened another thing should follow

begging the question- assumes the conclusion instead of supporting it

equivocation- key term or phrase that is changed throughout the argument

non sequitur- pattern of reasoning that doesn’t make sense

straw man- going against an argument that wasn’t present

red herring- irrelevant topic that pushes the audience away from the original issue

distorting the facts- manipulating data to make the audience come to a conclusion

protecting the evidence- rationalize because you don’t want to believe you’re wrong

Claim : There are many health problems related to obesity and being overweight.

Claim: Obesity increases medical cost annually.

Claim: Childhood obesity is also on the rise.

Claim: Obesity affects almost everyone.

Claim: Since obesity is such a complex problem, it requires a complex solution.

Solution: The solution for obesity requires the individual, the government, and the food industry to work together, I address this towards the end of the essay with the three block quotes and piece it all together.

Solution: The food industry being transparent on what they are putting out there for the consumer, I address this in the Verduin et al. article in my works cited.

Solution: Educate people on what they are eating, I also include this towards the end of my essay with the block quote about the food industry.

Diego Miranda

Janel Spencer

WRT101S 12157

Nov. 26, 2019

Fighting Obesity

Obesity and the related diseases are one of the leading causes of deaths in the United States. Obesity has many definitions but an easy one to remember is an excess of bodyfat that can cause health problems. According to Honor Whiteman of Medical News Today, “over the past 33 years, worldwide overweight and obesity rates among adults have increased by 27.5%, while such rates among children and adolescents have increased by 47.1%.” There are many health risks related to obesity including type 2 diabetes, multiple types of cancers, heart disease, and a lot more. Subsequently, people that are obese end up spending more for medical each year and other things such as life insurance. Obesity is a very complex situation so there are many variables that have to work together for a common solution.

According to the CDC, “weight that is higher than what is considered as a healthy weight for a given height is described as overweight or obese”(“Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity”).The same source said that a BMI between 25-29.9 is overweight and anything 30 or over is obese (“Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity”).BMI is easy to calculate. You divide your weight in pounds by your height in inches squared then multiply that by 703(Centers for Disease Control and Prevention).BMI is an easy screening tool to use but doesn’t tell all about someone’s body. For instance, if someone has a lot of muscle mass but is short and they calculate their BMI, they could fall under the obese or overweight side of the scale. This is why BMI is only a screening tool and isn’t a tell all.

There are many health problems related to obesity and being overweight. Some of them include heart disease, stroke, high blood pressure, diabetes, cancer, gallbladder disease, osteoarthritis, gout, and asthma (“Obesity: Health Risks Associated with Obesity”).  A study in 2013 found that obesity accounts for 18% of deaths among Americans with ages ranging from 40 to 85 (Blumenthal and Seervai). For cancer, obesity caused “7% of cancer related deaths” (Blumenthal and Seervai). “Obese people are between 1.5 to 2.5 times more likely to die of heart disease than people with normal body mass indices” (Blumenthal and Seervai). The World Health Organization said, “obesity has reached epidemic proportions globally, with at least 2.8 million people dying each year as a result of being overweight or obese” (“10 Facts on Obesity”).

Not only is there a health effect of obesity but a dollar effect also. According to the CDC, “the estimated annual medical cost of obesity in the United States was $147 billion in 2008 US dollars (“Adult Obesity Facts”). Value Walk made a diagram that breaks down individual costs of being obese in the United States. It said that annually the costs for males are $2,646 and the cost for females was $4,879 (Raza). It broke it down into separate categories including wage discrimination, direct medical, short-term disability, productivity, sick leave, life insurance, disability pension insurance, and even gasoline for cars.

Childhood obesity is also on a great rise. “More than 9 million adolescents are affected by excess weight” (“Obesity Statistics”). If you suffer from obesity in your childhood, you are “70% more likely to continue being affected by it into adulthood” (“Obesity Statistics”).  Many things lead to this, including obese parents making their kids eat what they eat causing them to become obese as well. Another factor being the rising sedentary lifestyles humans live and technological advances (“Obesity Statistics”).  This lifestyle has led to a decline of physical activity and watching more tv. “More than 40 percent of children watch 2 or more hours of television each day” (“Obesity Statistics”). We must break this lifestyle and our instant rely on technology if we are to have a fighting chance against obesity.

Obesity affects almost everyone. You either know of someone obese, someone who has died from obesity, or you are obese. Obesity doesn’t just affect one community, but it is prevalent in some places more than others. “Hispanics (47.0%) and non-Hispanic blacks (46.8%) had the highest age-adjusted prevalence of obesity, followed by non-Hispanic whites (37.9%) and non-Hispanic Asians (12.7%) (“Adult Obesity Facts.”). As stated before, around the world over 2.8 million people die each year from being overweight (“10 Facts on Obesity”). 

Since obesity is such a complex problem it requires a complex situation. The major variables in this problem are the individual, the government, and the food industry. There is a common saying that almost everyone that goes to the gym has heard one time or another. The saying is “you can’t outwork a bad diet.” Meaning that no matter how much you work out; it won’t matter if you still eat bad. The food industry plays a huge factor in the fight on obesity. Most people aren’t obese because they don’t workout enough, but because they eat too much. 

In an article titled “Solutions to obesity: perspectives from the food industry”, Patricia Verduin, Sanjiv Agarwal, and Susan Waltman make very relatable claims. In the article relating to the food industry they say:

Industry should promote nutrition education at all levels, from public schools to medical schools, and enhance nutrition awareness at the consumer level. Industry can create new products that meet individual nutritional needs, reformulate existing products to be healthier, and provide controlled portion sizes. In doing so, industry faces the challenge of satisfying consumer expectations for taste, quality, and price. The hope is that industry can develop healthier products by partnering with science-based communities and the government. (Verduin et al.)

These sentences from the source are putting responsibility on the food industry to show transparency about the nutritional side of the food and to make healthier options for the consumer and not just the cheapest thing they will can make. 

The article talks about the individual saying:

Consumers are the most important player in the solution to the obesity epidemic because they make individualized choices about food and lifestyle. As stated by Philipson in this symposium, if the consumer can be influenced with comprehensible nutrition information and a variety of healthy food choices, perhaps individuals can begin to address weight gain on a personal level. In addition to cultural and psychological influences, four motivators have been identified that affect consumer decisions: taste, quality, convenience, and price. Although consumers indicate that healthy eating and good nutrition are increasingly important to them, sales and surveys show they are more concerned with taste, convenience, and price…Moreover, consumers are confused with the conflicting messages regarding fat, carbohydrates, protein, and calories. Consumers need clarity and reliable nutrition information to make responsible dietary decisions.(Verduin et al.)

This paragraph is putting responsibility on the individual. They are the most important variable in this whole thing because they are the ones that make the decision about what to eat and the lifestyle to live. It then goes on to talk about if there are multiple choices of healthy food to eat and with proper education on nutrition, they can make better decisions on what to eat. 

The source talks about the government’s role in obesity by saying: 

The government can help educate consumers to make healthier choices through food labeling, physical activity endorsement, and the support of community-based programs. The food industry should cooperate with the government to guarantee the production and availability of low-calorie, nutritious foods. This can be achieved by providing incentives to industry and also stimulating media participation in the prevention of obesity. The government should develop and support new food technology and improve communication across responsible parties and consumers. (Verduin et al.)

This puts responsibility on the government, local or federal, to help educate people on what they are eating and help people get out and be active more. It talks about the food industry and the government to work together to make healthier foods for the individual.

            The obesity problem is all around the world. The solution to it is the government and the food industry working together to make healthy options for people to eat and be transparent on what they are putting out there. Also, to educate people on what they are eating. The individual needs to take advantage on the opportunity to learn about what they are eating, and also take advantage of healthier choices that are being sold. At the end of the day, it is up to the individual to make the choice and want to live a healthier lifestyle. I mean, why wouldn’t a person want to live a healthier lifestyle?

Everyone should hold themselves accountable and realize when their weight might be affecting their health. You can also hold other people accountable for their health by mentioning something to them and encouraging them to do something about it. You could even take it as far as helping them eat healthier and taking them to the gym.

Back towards the beginning of high school, I lost one of my uncles to a stroke due to him being obese. At the time I had a little extra weight that I wanted to lose. As sad as it was, this was a good push to not end up like my uncle and live an unhealthy lifestyle. From then on, I decided to get in shape and help people live a healthier lifestyle. Many times, at work, people have asked me for nutritional advice or to help them get in shape for their PT test. My call to action is wanting to help people live healthy lifestyles.

Works Cited

 “Adult Obesity Facts.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control 

and Prevention, 13 Aug. 2018, https://www.cdc.gov/obesity/data/adult.html, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Blumenthal, David. Seervai, Shanoor. “Rising Obesity in the United States Is a Public Health 

Crisis.” Home, 24 Apr. 2018, https://www.commonwealthfund.org/blog/2018/rising-obesity-united-states-public-health-crisis, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

 Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 

https://www.cdc.gov/healthyweight/assessing/bmi/childrens_bmi/childrens_bmi_formula.html,Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

 “Defining Adult Overweight and Obesity.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers 

for Disease Control and Prevention, 11 Apr. 2017, https://www.cdc.gov/obesity/adult/defining.html, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

 “Obesity: Health Risks Associated with Obesity.” OnHealth,

https://www.onhealth.com/content/1/health_risks_associated_with_obesity, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

“Obesity Statistics.” Obesity Action Coalition, https://www.obesityaction.org/get-educated/public-resources/obesity-statistics-fact-sheets/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Raza, Sheeraz. “The Costs Of Obesity, In Actual Dollars [Chart].” ValueWalk, 24 Aug. 2016, 

https://www.valuewalk.com/2016/08/the-costs-of-obesity-in-actual-dollars-chart/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

“10 Facts on Obesity.” World Health Organization, World Health Organization, 16 Oct. 2017, 

https://www.who.int/features/factfiles/obesity/en/, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Verduin, Patricia, et al. “Solutions to Obesity: Perspectives from the Food Industry.” OUP 

Academic, Oxford University Press, 1 July 2005, https://academic.oup.com/ajcn/article/82/1/259S/4863410, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

Whiteman, Honor. “Worldwide Obesity Rates See ‘Startling’ Increase over Past 

Decades.” Medical News Today, MediLexicon International, 29 May 2014, https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/277450.php#1, Accessed 22 Nov. 2019.

dependent clause: group of words that can’t stand alone, relies on another clause to complete its meaning

Essay 2 Example: “So that you’re not holding on to unsolved or confusing feelings.” This is a sentence fragment and can’t stand alone.

comma: indicating a pause, also used to separate items in a list

Essay 1 Example: “a really crushing, stressful and anxiety-inducing fact” I forgot to put a comma after stressful and before and.

hyphenate between words- when two or more words when they come before a noun they modify and act as a single idea, this is called a compound adjective.

Essay 2 Example: “I grew up in a military orientated family.” I should have added a hyphen between military and orientated.

I agree with immigration because it is the natural cycle of people. I also agree that some immigrants are good for society because they fill job gaps. I disagree with immigrants because an excess of immigrants can be negative on society. If you have an excess of people their wont be enough jobs for everyone. By focusing on border protection you can let a certain amount of people in a year.

It was most effective to not tell them my opinion on the topic so they wouldn’t become bias and agree with me just to not argue. I mainly learned that I need to focus on the opposing side and research more of why people would be opposed to it. I basically figured out I need to do more research.